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Reluctant Kiss

Somewhere
there
between
her lips
where laughter
escapes
and words
blurt out
(most inappropriately)
there lies
a kiss
in waiting.

 Eyes diverting
cheeks blushing
teeth biting
her bottom lip
trying
to stifle
the urge
to flight
(not fight).

 Oh, it’s no use
the kiss
is spooked
and quickly
retreats
into the abyss
of witty banter
and nervous laughter
disappointed
with itself.

 How is it
these lips
obviously
so full
of themselves
and noise
can tolerate
and give refuge to
such a
scared
timid
reluctant
kiss?

~ smj


You Shouldn’t Kiss Me Like This, by Toby Keith

Posted on July 22, 2009 at 11:28 pm in Poetic Escapes, poetry   |  RSS feed |   Reply   |   Trackback URL

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37 Comments to “Reluctant Kiss”

    
  2. Gray
    July 23, 2009 at 4:32 am

    Very nice, so endearing.

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  3. kacoldwell
    July 23, 2009 at 4:55 am

    Jesus Christ … I wish this didn’t remind me of someone.

    Great piece. My only pet peeve is the (fight) parenthetical statement after flight. I think the first parenthetical statement worked nicely, but I got snagged by that one. (Don’t mind me, I just like critiquing poetry because I know I’m not good at it myself.)

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  4. Forrester McLeod
    July 23, 2009 at 6:56 am

    I really love this!

    Thanks!

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  6. wordnerd45
    July 23, 2009 at 12:32 pm

    This is great — I like how you compare and contrast the “push” and “Pull” of the urge to kiss with the ability to speak. Two different uses for the lips. It’s a great poem!

    The Nerd

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  7. Samantha
    July 23, 2009 at 7:55 pm

    Raven – thank you, and thanks for stopping by. =)

    Gray – thank you and glad you stopped back over from blogger. It’s nice when we venture outside our own blog platforms.

    Kacoldwel – really? Well, I suppose there are a few reluctant kisses hiding out in a various lips out there… ;)
    And, yeah, I debated on the “(not fight)” thing myself. I went with it, because I was thinking of then biological “flight or fight” response we all have… but, not sure it works. ?? I am always open to suggestions and critiquing.. so, feel free! I know I need it, and it’s appreciated. LOL ;)

    Forrester – well, thanks! And thanks for checking out my blog here. I looked at yours too. You re hilarious…and a very good writer. I hope to read more from you soon.

    Poeteek – thanks! =) glad you liked it.

    wordnerd45 – thank you! Yes… you nailed the sentiment… the push and pull… the trepidation….

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  8. wordnerd45
    July 23, 2009 at 7:59 pm

    Absolutely…been there myself! Great to hear from you again! Check out “Porcelain Doll”…seems I’m in the mood to write some poetry about the rant I went on today!

    The Nerd

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  9. truthwalker
    July 23, 2009 at 8:51 pm

    That poem was soft, yet sorta hot. Nice work.

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  10. Utopian Fragments
    July 23, 2009 at 10:43 pm

    very very nice and the first stanza, for me, stands in its right place…..first..

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  11. Samantha
    July 24, 2009 at 2:56 am

    truthwalker – thank you. “sorta hot”. mission accomplished. ;)

    Utopian Fragments – thank you. The first verse wrote itself, practically, and I almost stopped there… not quite sure where else to take it.

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  12. rogerdemented
    July 24, 2009 at 3:04 am

    bring the two together..melding. how is that merging? love your writing, darlin’.

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  13. dakasky
    July 24, 2009 at 5:28 am

    I must have inspired this… ha ha! Sweet.

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  14. Samantha
    July 24, 2009 at 12:34 pm

    Rog – wait…?? which part are you talking about… or which comment referring to? perhaps I just need more coffee before I can think strait…. At any rate, thanks for stopping back and the compliment. =)

    dakasky – =) thank you… but, ummmm… no… not this time, not this poem. LOL.. but, something tells me you have inspired many a poem, as well as thoughts about kisses (reluctant or not). I mean, just look at you..
    (no really, girls, go look at him at: http://dakasky.wordpress.com/about ;),
    – and he can write too… )

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    • wordnerd45
      July 24, 2009 at 2:00 pm

      Um, yeaaaa…I accidentally set the muse loose on him. Now I might be unknowingly accused of cyber sexual harrassment. My muse needs to come with a disclaimer: “Blogger is not liable for any sexual innuendo she writes about another blogger’s online photographs”

      Think that will cover me? God I hope so, I’m too poor to afford an attorney.

      The Nerd

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  15. dakasky
    July 25, 2009 at 6:03 am

    oh sheesh, I am a bit shy sometimes – and now I am totally blushing! Egads!

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    • WordNerd45
      July 25, 2009 at 12:58 pm

      Men look good in pink!

      Down, down bad muse!!! Somebody get her a bucket of cold water, stat!

      The Nerd

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    • Samantha
      July 26, 2009 at 4:34 pm

      dakasky – my comment was meant to flatter… not totally embarass. Sorry bout that – but, you kow I meant it in a good way, right? I will take it back if you like. Are you telling me that you are the one housing the reluctant kisses yourself? hmmmm…. who knew? and how sweet…

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  16. magewing
    July 25, 2009 at 6:10 am

    delightfully and artfully captured

    and could as easily have been echoing the like hesitation that all too frequently comes on the kiss of a word meant for a poem

    yet catches me feeling the urge for my own lips to touch those

    . maggie

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  17. Samantha
    July 26, 2009 at 4:36 pm

    magewing –
    thank you… and, I like your other interpretation as well… very much… but, the end result was the best compliment of all.

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  18. Elly
    July 27, 2009 at 12:43 am

    Loved this one! =)

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  19. Samantha
    July 28, 2009 at 12:29 am

    Ellly –
    when logged into wordpress.. go to top left, “My Account”… then, “edit profile”… about half way down the page, where it says, “Primary blog” – but, your blog address. Voila. Hopefully, that’s it. ;)

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  20. Charles
    August 9, 2009 at 1:44 am

    these shapes are mesmerizing.

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  21. namelessneed
    August 10, 2009 at 4:04 am

    thanx for sharing this cool idea riding on yr words

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  22. loriswords
    August 14, 2009 at 8:53 pm

    really beautiful. i like it mucho.

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  23. Heartbroken princess
    November 6, 2012 at 12:31 pm

    A beautiful piece. Loved it a lot :-)

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    • Samanthamj
      November 8, 2012 at 5:29 pm

      Ah, this is one of my favorites too… reminds me of days gone by…. and funny how much we can change… and then again, not really sometimes. =)

      Thanks for taking the time to poke around on my blog some. Do you have a blog of poems you share?

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      • Heartbroken Princess
        November 8, 2012 at 9:58 pm

        No… I tried signing up here but it got rejected. Could you temme the procedures? Also, Do you have a mail id where its possible to contact you?????

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  24. LeProsey
    March 25, 2014 at 12:32 pm

    An honest account of nervous excitement. I love it.

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